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PostSubject: Uchiha, Dengen   Uchiha, Dengen EmptyWed Nov 06, 2013 3:45 am

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Starrking:
Playby: Itachi
Basic Character Information:
Name: Dengen Uchiha
Alias: Starrking [TOP SECRET]
Age: 22
Gender: Male
Appearance: Dengen Uchiha is known to be a serious Uchiha. He stands to be 6 feet and 3 inches, which is quite tall and he also possesses longer than life hair. Dengens hair, like mostly all Uchiha, is pitch black and so is his eyes until of course the sharingan is activated. Dengen has a weight of about 200 pounds give or take 15 lbs. Dengen Uchiha wears an all dark blue suit, designed to be separate pieces of clothing. Dengen has a white belt and has white socks that match and also go over his shoes. An odd characteristic about Dengen, is that he paints his nails the same color blueish purple as his clothing. The young Uchiha also has a fishnet shirt underneath and a small necklace to end.

Dengen is usually in the city, and when in the city, he dresses very formal in order to give the Uchiha a good name around the city. Dengen wears all black suits and matches it with dress shoes. Wearing rings and ear rings when he feels like it. Dengens hair would be tied up if he is caught wearing his formal attire, but when in combat and any other reason after that, Dengen has a tendency to let his hair down; this doesnt mean that he wouldnt let his hair down once in a while when wearing his suits. A special and unique characteristic that Dengen Uchiha has, is that he carries around an old school Konohagakure headband that he bought off the black-market. This headband, although carved in the center, is an inspiration for Dengen to achieve his goal.

Personality: Dengen like many suspect about the Uchiha bloodline has a serious type of personality. He is too caught up in his own world and how to form strategies that he developed a weakness of having a one track mind. Dengen hasn’t always been this serious but after the unexpected death of his father, he had no choice but to take the matter of life serious. Dengen loved to play with his friends, and his favorite game was “War,” where the children reenact the events of the Great Shinobi World War. After the death of his father Dengen devoted his life to training so that he may one day live up to the Uchiha name. Dengen isn’t liked by many people in the outside world, and that is because Dengen doesn’t give them a chance, saying that he would rather stay with his friends and family then meet new people. Dengen has been cooped up in his home in order to keep himself busy training and away from danger. This out casting away from society left Dengen without friends as he aged and he consumed his life in his journey as a shinobi. Wondering what his fate is and where is heading, he knows one thing for sure and that is that he is loyal to his clan.

Dengen doesn’t get angry fast but when you speak about his Uchiha heritage or his parents then he will show you hell. Other than in those scenarios, it is nearly impossible to get Dengen angry. Feelings is viewed as a distraction and Dengen is trying to train himself to sway away from them. Although it is hard since happiness is a feeling nobody will ever want to get rid of. The young Uchiha spends his time training so his personality around others is quite anti-social. Dengen is quite and in battle he enjoys the role of strategist rather than leader, even though that’s the case a lot of people have mentioned before that Dengen has a leader type of personality. Being the most powerful Uchiha to ever live is not an easy task seeing as so much great Uchihas have lived before, but Dengen is dedicated to becoming stronger than even he believes possible.

Your Ninja Way: “The proper course of action is the one that maximizes utility, specifically defined as maximizing happiness and reducing suffering.”
Goals: Lead the Uchiha to greatness & to re-establish Konohagakure no Sato.

Bloodline Information:
Bloodline Name: Uchiha Bloodline
Kekkei Genkai | Bloodline Techniques: Sharingan / Copy Wheel Eye
Approved Bloodline Application Link:  Approved Bloodline

Clan Information:
Clan Name: Uchiha Clan
Clan History:
Spoiler:
Clan Application Link: [LINK]


Role Information:
Title: Head of the Uchiha Clan
Rank: A rank
Residency: Land of Rivers l l Miare City
Organization | Group:

Skill Information:
Skill Specialty:
-Main: Genjutsu
-Sub: Ninjutsu
-Tertiary: Taijutsu
Elemental Affinity:
-Main: Fire
-Sub: Water
-Advanced: N/A

Special Characteristics:
Special Characteristics:
Spoiler:

History Information:
History: Birth ARC- Starr Child

Being born in the Government District of Kitai City in the Saigo Region, Dengen had a great education, a lovely home and a safe surrounding, being that he lived in Upper City Living. Dengen was an odd case of “New Blood,” a case that was just becoming familiar now as bloodlines from the old world began to rise again to the new world. Dengen was born as one of the few lucky ones though being biologically compatible to the Uchiha gene. Dengen became the first found living relative of the Uchiha Clan that was once thought of as being extinct. Being born with such a rare bloodline caused trouble in Dengens household as thieves attempted to steal the Uchiha DNA. The times became so troublesome that even Dengens father died defending him from Medic Shinobis attempting to kidnap the kid.

Dengen was young when his mother first realized he had a gifted mind. Dengen was able to recall information that he learned before he was able to speak. This was incredible and his eidetic memory proved to be unique in itself. Dengen was a bright child and some would have even said he is a star child, an Uchiha of the new age. Raised with new beliefs and testaments than the ancestor Uchihas. Dengen has a large family, and the Uchiha were together considered a family, seeing as they had to protect each other from foreign threats.

Academy ARC- Moon Day

After the death of his father, Dengens mother made a deal with the government. She asked for them to take her son in order to keep him safe, then they replied by explaining to her that now there are more Uchihas in the village and there is a “Home Schooling” program he could take in order to be safe and get the proper training to fit his unique bloodline. The mother agreed without hesitating, leaving Dengen to stay home for mostly all of his Academy years. The only time Dengen would go out and see those he used to call friends were in sparring matches against the Academy student, where he was brought in, standing out as an obvious out cast. Dengen used this time to train, and because of his unique trait that had nothing to do with his bloodline, Dengen became a true child genius; at the age of 8 he graduated from the Academy as the youngest in the class and finally became a genin.

In one of his sparring matches, Dengen was partnered up with someone that he considers to be a good friend. The first match Dengen was put in was against another Uchiha, a young man with prominent taijutsu skills. He showed Dengen a thing or two while combating but at the end, Dengen one by playing with the kids mind. Dengen found out right there that Genjutsu was going to be his prominent fighting style, taking a back seat to taijutsu. Genjutsu is a game of the mind, and Dengen has said this many times as a young man. It was interesting to see him grow up and use this knowledge into the actual fighting style.

Genin ARC- The Sun of Man

Having an eidetic memory made Dengen a true genius outside of the shinobi life, but it was when Dengen incorporated the abilities into his fighting that he realized the true potential of his traits. Being an Uchiha, he felt it was only right to master the art of Genjutsu. Dengen trained genjutsu whenever he could and when he couldn't, he just attempted to work on his taijutsu. Dengen was a true believer in health within the MIND and BODY, so he practices it with his Genjutsu and Taijutsu. The young Uchiha began to notice the true potential behind training, so he vowed to grow up and become a legendary shinobi. Dengen became a dreamer in the time when he graduated the Academy and his dream was to unite mankind and give birth to a New World with Order in the governance, unlike the chaotic systems of governance of old, Dengen wants to build a true Democratic Republic. “A land for the people, and created by the people.”

Dengen accomplished his Dream, founding and stabilizing the Uchiha Clan. Of course, the young shinobi, being a genin, felt that the responsibility is overwhelming. Dengen feels like he is up to the task, and he did well for many of months leading his clan to establishing a compound and a name around Kitai. Dengen thought long and hard about what he was going to do next, but he needed to do something. The young Uchiha left his clan, leaving it to his most trusted clan members. Dengen returned to see that Kitai was destroyed by one of his right hand men, and Dengen could not help but to smile at the sheer power he has gripped. The leave was well taken, and Dengen is back to see what he can do with his new found knowledge acquired outside in the wilderness. Knowledge that he considers to be [TOP SECRET].

Chunin ARC- The King is Born

After the destruction of Kitai, Dengen Uchiha couldn’t believe his luck. He happened to leave the day the city was destroyed by a roaring beast. His reason for leaving was to complete a mission and to his devastation, he seen Kitai in ruins when he returned. Blood, organs and bodies in general created the layout for the city. It was a horrific sight and as Dengen sought to leave, he noticed a man that was stuck under a fallen tree. The man was injured but very much alive and he was crying out for help. He didn’t see the young Uchiha so he had a chance to flee unnoticed, but Dengen couldn’t live with such guilt. Dengen then turned and assisted the man, and after, they went on to help a few other shinobis who were trapped.

Kitai city was no more and a lot of the shinobi life that resided inside were not being sensed anymore. Dengen knew that most of the high ranking shinobis were more than gone in this predicament in time, so he took the obligation of doing things a genin wouldn’t regularly do. He was saving people while getting himself in dangerous scenarios, and he did it so much that it came to a point in which Dengen gained recognition by a fellow high ranking shinobi within the city. He then told the young Uchiha about becoming Chunin, and as Dengen explained that he is genin, the man simply laughed and said. “Kid. You’ve done your fair share to help the city of Kitai. You have eve grown a reputation. If you don’t deserve it, I don’t know who does.”

Jounin ARC- Starr King and the Sun & Moon

It took just one day and one night in order for Dengen Uchiha to see the monstrosities happening before his eyes. After the destruction of Kitai, nearly everyone in the world went on survival mode. Seeing as Kitai was the source of a lot of the world’s products and financial distributions. A lot of theft and killing ran ramped around the shinobi lifestyle and order needed to be made. Cities began to be formed and two hidden villages were said to have been established not too far along. Dengen needed a way to keep up with the time and as soon as he was promoted Jounin, he gave birth to a new personality, and he called it Starrking. When Dengen is Starrking, he wears a mask and a black outfit. Nobody knows about his identity because he keeps it a secret, and this he must do since he at times is forced to pull pity crimes in the uniform.

Starrking was born in order for Dengen to handle things with certain manners that he didn’t want to be identified afterwards with. Be it torcher or anything else, Starrking is who Dengen turns into in order to pull these morale-less acts. Starrking wears a black long coat that has long sleeves and a hood with a black tight suit underneath. A white belt on his waist tightened, in order to keep it still and ninja pants, sock and shoes to go with it all. Dengen has a yin & yang mask that is white in his right side and red in his left, the eyes appear dark until the sharingan is activated, in which it will glow outward. Dengen Uchiha has only decided to do this, because the world is on edge again, awaiting to see if power will corrupt or if maybe true peace can be obtained. Nevertheless, Dengen has to do his part in order to save his clan, even if it means going to drastic measures.


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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha, Dengen   Uchiha, Dengen EmptyThu Nov 07, 2013 12:23 am

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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha, Dengen   Uchiha, Dengen EmptyThu Nov 07, 2013 2:56 am

Please note that someone else already had an application up using Madara Uchiha has a playby, so I will have to ask you to use someone else for yours.
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha, Dengen   Uchiha, Dengen EmptyThu Nov 07, 2013 5:31 am

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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha, Dengen   Uchiha, Dengen EmptyThu Nov 07, 2013 6:19 pm

SC Portion

Name: Jutsu Master, Kinjutsu Specialist
Rank: A
Description: The user is known for his unique creative prowess. Being able to create jutsus specially for himself and strictly able to be utilized only by himself. The user has no ethics in terms of creating jutsus that are widely thought of as restricted or forbidden. Techniques that cause harm to the user, techniques that violate the laws of nature, and certain techniques that are known to cause massive collateral damage, are the categories for techniques that have been banned from being taught or used but despite that, the user does not carry any legal consequences in respects to the villages they are used in, thus he learned to acquire this special trait.

It has been stated that a SC must be attached to a specific Kinjutsu. Thus this SC wouldn't be approved.

Name: Eidetic Memory
Rank: A
Description: Dengen has the ability to recall anything that he has experienced with his senses, with extreme precision and in abundant volume. This comes in very handily in situations when he is trying to remember information, and when he is performing complex tasks that require good memory. Being able to recall memory that are products of the senses is very important in Dengens Genjutsu mastery. Genjutsus produced by Dengen are just THAT much more real than the average genjutsu user. Genjutsus are considered a rank higher in strength and thus a rank higher in Kai is needed to be released. [Genjutsu potency +1]

I'm not seeing what the Genjutsu potency +1 is meaning. Besides you appear to be placing two benefits into one SC. First, how does having a Eidetic mind give you an +1 advantage in Genjutsu? Not only that, but if you want to be better than other in Genjutsu, it would require a separate SC, not one placed into another.

Name: Muscle Memory Speedy
Rank: A
Description: Dengen has trained his whole life in order to be fast, agile, flexible and to have a fast reaction time. This extensive training has caused Dengens muscles to contract something called muscle memory. This allows Dengen, who has trained his body for speed, gain the edge in movement speeds [speed boosts 20%]. The odd thing about muscle memory is, that even if unconscious, a person’s body will react on their own based on past experiences.

How would you be able to use this SC unconsciously. It's physically impossible.

Name: Supreme Reaction Time
Rank: A
Description: Dengen is not a paragon of raw physical power, and in order to stay in one piece, he has trained himself extensively to avoid attacks, rather than condition himself to withstand them. As such, he is more agile than most people, and is able to dodge physical attacks, techniques or weapon based attacks coming at him as long as he could see it coming.

How you word this, implies that you will be able to dodge anything, no matter the letter grade, as long as you can see it. Reword this so that it doesn't look like you can dodge everything.

Equipment Portion

Kamui Kunai. - There's no reason your Kanui should have a speed increase of 10%

Jutsu Portion

God's Eye - Only those with a Sensory SC can use Sensory jutsu, which you don't have. Unless you are willing to drop one of your SC to gain the ability to use Sensory Jutsu, than you going have to remove Gods Eye.

Devil Shield - The shield should be able to withstand 1 tech of it's rank before shattering. If the tech is a rank above the shield, your shield fails to protect you.

Shuriken Shadow Dance - This is a Bukijutsu technique, not Ninjutsu. And since it's the same rank as yourself, you can't have it since you don't have Weaponary as a speciality.

No D-B Fire Jutsu? I don't find it possible or believable.

Fire Breath - Fire is weak against water, unless wind enhances it. Thus, it safe to say that it would only evaporate techs two ranks below the rank of the Fire Breath.

Explosive Tags Technique - Definitely not a Fire Jutsu. And you don't define how many explosive tags are begin used.

No D-B Water Jutsu? I don't find it possible or believable.

Same with Fire and Water, no D-B Genjutsu? I don't find it possible or believable.

Temple of Nirvana - You say a flash of light comes from your palms. How do you make this light flash from your palm. Chakra is invisible.

Utakata - Duration for this should be until Kai is used or appropriate wound is taken. In case you didn't know what that meant, no severing of a limb to get out of this Genjutsu.

Genjutsu Shibari - Same for Utakata. Also, can't have the exact same trigger as Utakata.

Genjutsu Kage Bushin no Jutsu - Im confused with your durations. Please clarify this.

~That's all... for now
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha, Dengen   Uchiha, Dengen EmptyThu Nov 07, 2013 9:04 pm

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It has been stated that a SC must be attached to a specific Kinjutsu. Thus this SC wouldn't be approved.
I have a certain Kinjutsu in mind. Can I get this approved and then train the Kinjutsu or do I have to have the Kinjutsu on my starting 15 list?

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I'm not seeing what the Genjutsu potency +1 is meaning. Besides you appear to be placing two benefits into one SC. First, how does having a Eidetic mind give you an +1 advantage in Genjutsu? Not only that, but if you want to be better than other in Genjutsu, it would require a separate SC, not one placed into another.
Memory has literally everything to do with the senses. Genjutsu also has everything to do with the senses. I am not adding two benefits into one SC but I am instead upgrading the original SC. Eidetic Memory is after all a C-rank SC, and to apply his memory to his fighting style isn't far fetched. The upgrade went from a C to an A by applying genjutsu.

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How would you be able to use this SC unconsciously. It's physically impossible.
I'll remove that aspect of the SC if you'd like. But I LOVE psychology and it actually is possible =x here is a few things on it...

Muscle Memory is Motor Memory and their definition is, "When a movement is repeated over time, a long-term muscle memory is created for that task, eventually allowing it to be performed without conscious effort."

I'm sure you know what "without conscious effort" means, aka unconscious and also... When Rock Lee fights in his Drunken state and Sea Sick state, he fights with muscle memory. He has even fought while sleeping and been seen training while sleeping loll

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How you word this, implies that you will be able to dodge anything, no matter the letter grade, as long as you can see it. Reword this so that it doesn't look like you can dodge anything.
Since the original (C) says that I would be able to dodge things that are my rank or less, I was thinking that A-rank can get the benefit of blocking something that is above my rank by one and less.

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Kamui Kunai. - There's no reason your Kanui should have a speed increase of 10%
The weight of an object will increase the momentum of the trajectory. Im no physicist but here it goes...
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God's Eye - Only those with a Sensory SC can use Sensory jutsu, which you don't have. Unless you are willing to drop one of your SC to gain the ability to use Sensory Jutsu, than you going have to remove Gods Eye.
I'll add a sensor SC.

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Devil Shield - The shield should be able to withstand 1 tech of it's rank before shattering. If the tech is a rank above the shield, your shield fails to protect you.
Alright. Sounds fair.

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Shuriken Shadow Dance - This is a Bukijutsu technique, not Ninjutsu. And since it's the same rank as yourself, you can't have it since you don't have Weaponary as a speciality.
I'll remove it.

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No D-B Fire Jutsu? I don't find it possible or believable.
No D-B Water Jutsu? I don't find it possible or believable.
Same with Fire and Water, no D-B Genjutsu? I don't find it possible or believable.
I dont HAVE to pick D and B rank techniques. Doesnt say anything about mandatory D-B techniques anywhere. And I would rather train those after I get approved. This seems more like criticism than MoD work, I say this simply because this is stricly based on your opinion on what is believable rather than the site rules. Not trying to start anything.

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Fire Breath - Fire is weak against water, unless wind enhances it. Thus, it safe to say that it would only evaporate techs two ranks below the rank of the Fire Breath.
Consider this edited.

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Explosive Tags Technique - Definitely not a Fire Jutsu. And you don't define how many explosive tags are begin used.
Brother believe me. I am not cheating you out. This is a canon technique and it says on the Narutowiki page that it is a Fire Technique and I also took the whole thing word for word, so that is why it doesnt have a total of explosive tags. [LINK]

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Temple of Nirvana - You say a flash of light comes from your palms. How do you make this light flash from your palm. Chakra is invisible.
I could name a number of occasions in which chakra is visible. An easy example would me in the Mystical Palm technique. If you are trying to say that Chakra in "not bright," then that is a different statement in which I would say... Why cant I create a jutsu that does? lol

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Utakata - Duration for this should be until Kai is used or appropriate wound is taken. In case you didn't know what that meant, no severing of a limb to get out of this Genjutsu.
I guess I can add the Kai part, but one would think that it is common sense, since that is how to dispel any and all genjutsu. Although, "Dismembering body such as cutting off a limb will be enough" is a quote taken straight from the genjutsu guidelines on breaking out of an A-rank technique.

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Genjutsu Shibari - Same for Utakata. Also, can't have the exact same trigger as Utakata.
Maybe I just skipped through the genjutsu rules, but why cant I have the same trigger? There are jutsus that use the same Hand-sign, and over time my triggers are going to overlap. It is almost inevitable, since it is pointless and EXTREMELY hard to create a new trigger for every new genjutsu. I hope you understand this, because I can change the trigger to this technique and believe me I will, but to have a diff. trigger for all my genjutsus. In the long run, it is going to be a bit chaotic.

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Genjutsu Kage Bushin no Jutsu - Im confused with your durations. Please clarify this.
The duration is something else gotten from the Genjutsu Guidelines under the olfactory sense, or as it is labeled here I think, "The Sense of Smell."
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PostSubject: Re: Uchiha, Dengen   Uchiha, Dengen EmptySat Nov 09, 2013 12:18 am

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It has been stated that a SC must be attached to a specific Kinjutsu. Thus this SC wouldn't be approved.
I have a certain Kinjutsu in mind. Can I get this approved and then train the Kinjutsu or do I have to have the Kinjutsu on my starting 15 list?

What Kinjutsu do you have in mind?

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I'm not seeing what the Genjutsu potency +1 is meaning. Besides you appear to be placing two benefits into one SC. First, how does having a Eidetic mind give you an +1 advantage in Genjutsu? Not only that, but if you want to be better than other in Genjutsu, it would require a separate SC, not one placed into another.
Memory has literally everything to do with the senses. Genjutsu also has everything to do with the senses. I am not adding two benefits into one SC but I am instead upgrading the original SC. Eidetic Memory is after all a C-rank SC, and to apply his memory to his fighting style isn't far fetched. The upgrade went from a C to an A by applying genjutsu.

Still look like two benefits in one SC. But I shall get a second opinion.

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How would you be able to use this SC unconsciously. It's physically impossible.
I'll remove that aspect of the SC if you'd like. But I LOVE psychology and it actually is possible =x here is a few things on it...

Muscle Memory is Motor Memory and their definition is, "When a movement is repeated over time, a long-term muscle memory is created for that task, eventually allowing it to be performed without conscious effort."

I'm sure you know what "without conscious effort" means, aka unconscious and also... When Rock Lee fights in his Drunken state and Sea Sick state, he fights with muscle memory. He has even fought while sleeping and been seen training while sleeping loll

You mean subconscious... which is different from unconscious. One indicates a lack of brain activity, the other indicates brain activity beneath the conscious effort of the body.  

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How you word this, implies that you will be able to dodge anything, no matter the letter grade, as long as you can see it. Reword this so that it doesn't look like you can dodge anything.
Since the original (C) says that I would be able to dodge things that are my rank or less, I was thinking that A-rank can get the benefit of blocking something that is above my rank by one and less.

If C is only your rank and less, what makes you think A would be one above its rank and less? If anything, A would be worded the same as C. Thus you don't get the benefits of being able to dodge S.

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Kamui Kunai. - There's no reason your Kanui should have a speed increase of 10%
The weight of an object will increase the momentum of the trajectory. Im no physicist but here it goes...
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I'll allow you to have this.
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God's Eye - Only those with a Sensory SC can use Sensory jutsu, which you don't have. Unless you are willing to drop one of your SC to gain the ability to use Sensory Jutsu, than you going have to remove Gods Eye.
I'll add a sensor SC.

Don't see the SC that you were suppose to add.

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Devil Shield - The shield should be able to withstand 1 tech of it's rank before shattering. If the tech is a rank above the shield, your shield fails to protect you.
Alright. Sounds fair.

You haven't change this.

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Shuriken Shadow Dance - This is a Bukijutsu technique, not Ninjutsu. And since it's the same rank as yourself, you can't have it since you don't have Weaponary as a speciality.
I'll remove it.

You haven't removed it.

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No D-B Fire Jutsu? I don't find it possible or believable.
No D-B Water Jutsu? I don't find it possible or believable.
Same with Fire and Water, no D-B Genjutsu? I don't find it possible or believable.
I dont HAVE to pick D and B rank techniques. Doesnt say anything about mandatory D-B techniques anywhere. And I would rather train those after I get approved. This seems more like criticism than MoD work, I say this simply because this is stricly based on your opinion on what is believable rather than the site rules. Not trying to start anything.

Yes it's an opinion of mine. I shall get a second opnion.

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Fire Breath - Fire is weak against water, unless wind enhances it. Thus, it safe to say that it would only evaporate techs two ranks below the rank of the Fire Breath.
Consider this edited.

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Explosive Tags Technique - Definitely not a Fire Jutsu. And you don't define how many explosive tags are begin used.
Brother believe me. I am not cheating you out. This is a canon technique and it says on the Narutowiki page that it is a Fire Technique and I also took the whole thing word for word, so that is why it doesnt have a total of explosive tags. [LINK]

Give me a number.

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Temple of Nirvana - You say a flash of light comes from your palms. How do you make this light flash from your palm. Chakra is invisible.
I could name a number of occasions in which chakra is visible. An easy example would me in the Mystical Palm technique. If you are trying to say that Chakra in "not bright," then that is a different statement in which I would say... Why cant I create a jutsu that does? lol

Because its stated in the wiki that chakra isn't visible. Only reason you can see the chakra from mystical palm technique is because it lets the viewer know that chakra is being used. And to make chakra visible, you gonna release a lot of it.

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Utakata - Duration for this should be until Kai is used or appropriate wound is taken. In case you didn't know what that meant, no severing of a limb to get out of this Genjutsu.
I guess I can add the Kai part, but one would think that it is common sense, since that is how to dispel any and all genjutsu. Although, "Dismembering body such as cutting off a limb will be enough" is a quote taken straight from the genjutsu guidelines on breaking out of an A-rank technique.

Genjutsu is getting reworked. Thus your point?

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Genjutsu Shibari - Same for Utakata. Also, can't have the exact same trigger as Utakata.
Maybe I just skipped through the genjutsu rules, but why cant I have the same trigger? There are jutsus that use the same Hand-sign, and over time my triggers are going to overlap. It is almost inevitable, since it is pointless and EXTREMELY hard to create a new trigger for every new genjutsu. I hope you understand this, because I can change the trigger to this technique and believe me I will, but to have a diff. trigger for all my genjutsus. In the long run, it is going to be a bit chaotic.

I see.
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Genjutsu Kage Bushin no Jutsu - Im confused with your durations. Please clarify this.
The duration is something else gotten from the Genjutsu Guidelines under the olfactory sense, or as it is labeled here I think, "The Sense of Smell."

Genjutsu is getting reworked. And I don't see an explanation.
Make the changes.
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